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Caption:

Simultaneously all three went for the ball, and the coconut-like sound of their heads colliding secretly delighted the bird.

Alt text:

All right!

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  • m_‮fOPAEnglish
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    2 months ago

    Some background on this comic:

    Transcript:

    When I originally wrote this caption, it read (in part): “…the coconut-like sound of their heads hitting secretly delighted the bird.” That’s the way it was first published.

    Then I got a letter from some fellow who suggested, in this case, the word “colliding” would be a better substitute for the word “hitting.”

    This was quite strange to me. First of all, I had struggled with this caption and never felt comfortable with the final outcome. And secondly, he was right. “Colliding” was a much better word, giving the caption an improved rhythm. So I changed it.